tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post7589197723469293584..comments2023-09-16T01:11:48.408-07:00Comments on Turning Phrases: Writing About Writing: Chapter 1 Redux MarathonKL and JLYhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-19533497612090916812012-09-02T19:00:23.380-07:002012-09-02T19:00:23.380-07:00To Anonymous (2/18/12): We're really glad that...To Anonymous (2/18/12): We're really glad that you enjoyed the story. Life happened to get in the way of our being able to continue the novel, but we're hoping to get it back up and running soon. Thanks for your support!KL and JLYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-34413507907498521572012-09-02T18:59:29.006-07:002012-09-02T18:59:29.006-07:00To Anonymous (2/14/12): We had to take the novel o...To Anonymous (2/14/12): We had to take the novel offline while we were querying agents, and that also meant taking down the main website. Sorry it's hard to find. We are currently working to make it available and accessible to everyone.KL and JLYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-44424577571370811022012-09-02T18:57:11.528-07:002012-09-02T18:57:11.528-07:00To Chris: That is a very good question. It's h...To Chris: That is a very good question. It's hard to say without any concrete criteria, but we're trying to do our best. KL and JLYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-73514547271499181992012-09-02T18:53:23.592-07:002012-09-02T18:53:23.592-07:00To Anonymous: We've been gone from the site fo...To Anonymous: We've been gone from the site for a while, partially due to life events and partially due to the fact that we were trying to get picked up by a publishing house. We are back now, and hoping to put up the website soon. Thank you for your kind words. <br />KL and JLYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-43830006584455223132012-02-29T11:12:12.407-08:002012-02-29T11:12:12.407-08:00I have been wondering what happened to the site/co...I have been wondering what happened to the site/comic for a while. Between work and moving and travel, and a computer dying thus losing my links - I was wondering the other day what became of Eastridge Academy and it's students. After searching I found little information and the site no longer available. I loved your story very much and I'm curious to know if it continues at all in any form?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-2641480683509946982012-02-18T12:45:30.279-08:002012-02-18T12:45:30.279-08:00Hey. I wandered away from this story a few years a...Hey. I wandered away from this story a few years ago due to life getting busy. Recently it I have been wondering what happened in the world after I left. So I finally cracked down and searched through the web for online fiction. Now it looks like this page has not seen any activity since 2010, and the main page is down.<br /><br />This is very sad. I really enjoyed this story. I am not sure what happened to you guys, but I sincerely hope you are doing okay, and that you will find the time and energy to get back to it. Thanks for the good times. <br /><br /><3Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-45752038189204396082012-02-14T09:04:45.822-08:002012-02-14T09:04:45.822-08:00Where are you. Your book is so hard to find. If I ...Where are you. Your book is so hard to find. If I find it, it costs 100$. Your main site is closed.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-1580568698951005792010-08-04T22:21:21.894-07:002010-08-04T22:21:21.894-07:00just read SFA and i must say as a keen reader i am...just read SFA and i must say as a keen reader i am impressed, i loved the story and yeah it had it's flaws and wasn't perfect but nothing ever is, the point is i couldnt stop reading :). just wondering when Book 2 is expected to be complete? and how many books are you planning to write for SFA? hope you don't give up and keep writing :) it would be a shame to not finish this story ><* the thief action scenes are just pure awesomeness!!!!! always intense, always something new, and always keeps me on my toes ^^ please dont give up on this, i hope there will be a time where you can dedicate your full attention to this ^^ i will definantly buy if it becomes available in the UK!!<br /><br /><br />just wanted to note that i do agree about the misguiding order of the prologues, i assumed fell was the main character in all this, partially because he was the first character introduced, but i also think mainly because he is a stereo typical hero, starts off really weak and helpless, but with an ambition, works hard, shows the highest potential for growth. but he does show i would say slightly annoying growth, as in you want him to get strong quick but it's so painstakingly long its annoying (good thing) but one thing i didnt really like is how sometimes he would revert to his useless weak self (beat by that girl with the rapier during rankngs, way in which he struggles in fights against clearly weaker people, this is the guy that challenged rakam.. he should be a lot cooler in terms of fightinh, just how averi is at thief battles. im gonna shut up now hahaha. good luck!!!!!SuperCHunkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09333913077080250285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-92032207216244316772010-04-17T20:32:21.609-07:002010-04-17T20:32:21.609-07:00Hey KL,
I love the work all of you guys do, it...Hey KL,<br /><br />I love the work all of you guys do, it's an excellent story, I just thought I'd provide two little things I noticed.<br /><br />Firstly, the "contact us" link at the bottom of some pages (I don't know if it's all of them) takes you to the terms of service. That's why my comments wound up here.<br /><br />Secondly, If you're at the main page of the third chapter in book two, it doesn't show the fourth chapter. At all. I had to hunt through the archives to the end of chapter three, then take the jump to chapter four. Just thought I'd try and help you out! :)MattRhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173649403643881269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-90282188834007020662010-04-10T23:12:29.205-07:002010-04-10T23:12:29.205-07:00To Matt: KL and I had actually been talking about ...To Matt: KL and I had actually been talking about editing book one for awhile, but what really pushed us to rewrite the first book was the feedback and energy we'd received from a writing workshop we'd attended. After getting some comments from agents, editors, and fellow writers, we were inspired to take another stab at the first book and redress some of the initial issues we'd had with it. We do regret having to stop our work on book two, but book one re-writes aside, KL and I also had serious family and academic issues that we needed to deal with at the same time.<br />To Chris: I don't think there is a method to be certain a new opening is improved over the others, but KL and I are just trying to feel things out. <br />To Anonymous: Wisteria's Ling Monastery is a central point, but it will not be taken out of the main plot, merely restructured.KL and JLYhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16483688379542476367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-72572716010327626882010-04-09T06:06:06.657-07:002010-04-09T06:06:06.657-07:00Wasn't Wysteria's monastery a central poin...Wasn't Wysteria's monastery a central point for the plot? I mean didn't an army attack it as a prelude to kidnapping princess Averi (whom they thought was Wysteria) and TRYING TO START A WAR with Seraph?<br /><br />As for Fell being a central character? I don't know, but I DO like how the story shows him growing from a bumbling farmer who had to be rescued by a cow to a stout warrior who could take down three thugs that have been harassing him all his life.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-70219666303708770112010-04-08T00:09:41.719-07:002010-04-08T00:09:41.719-07:00All hard questions you ask in your blog, but I so ...All hard questions you ask in your blog, but I so wonder most of all whether you're not always going to have down sides. Is there some way to measure if a new one has improved over the others?Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15578603442746442086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3497318139930230344.post-401451862942898112010-04-07T04:19:22.215-07:002010-04-07T04:19:22.215-07:00Out of curiosity... what caused the sudden desire ...Out of curiosity... what caused the sudden desire to edit book one? While I don't disagree with your reasoning, I find it odd that you suddenly stopped work on book two to edit book one again.<br /><br />On that note, I think the entire book could be improved by a rewrite focusing on viewpoint, sort of along the lines of what you're saying in your third point. Instead of building up a connection with one or two viewpoint characters, the viewpoint really seems like... wandering third person. It is somewhat scattered and limits attachment to any single character. Each scene should be limited to a single viewpoint character. <br /><br />Using two primary viewpoints (Averi and Wisteria) really seems the best route to me. In fact, focusing on writing everything from their viewpoints could really bring out more depth in characters like Fell and Rai, slowly exposing the mystery of their pasts rather than it being obvious.Matt McBrienhttp://www.mattmcbrien.comnoreply@blogger.com